As an old English teacher I find paragraph four bothersome. My favorite
professor used to say, "To deftly split an infinitive is the mark of a
good writer." The phrase "...to not only freely use..." is egregiously
non-deft; moreover, it's arguably the worst split since Kevin left Britney.
May I offer a slightly more graceful first sentence:
"Linux freedom allows users not only to use its operating system and
application programs freely, but also to MODIFY FREELY, CUSTOMIZE, AND
DISTRIBUTE FREELY both the basic operating system and its application
programs."
In addition, the first sentences of paragraph four and paragraph six
might have been composed by the Department of Redundancy Department.
Just to let you know somebody's reading the brochure and taking it
seriously (but good-humoredly.)
Bob Eaton
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