PR: 17Sep2003

Concerning the Project Manager quote:

Re. file and web server... done

Re. IT should be information technology... done

Re. The only way...that it never crashes." We have already stated that it is
"stable", no need for personal attacks. ... changed to:
The only way end users could know that their server was running under a
Linux Operating System was the fact that it never crashes.

Re. Is spreadsheet one word? ... My spell check thinks so.

Re. OpenOffice is commercial as well. ... Changed to OpenOffice.org

Re. I would use GNU/Linux throughout ... Didn't do this in the quote. Might
need to be done in the press release.

-----Original Message-----

Message: 3
Date: Thu, 18 Sep 2003 08:10:05 -0700 (MST)
Subject: Re: PR: 17Sep2003
From: "Derek Neighbors" <derek@gnue.org>
To: <plug-discuss@lists.plug.phoenix.az.us>
Cc: <PLUGd@LuftHans.com>, <PLUG-discuss@lists.PLUG.phoenix.az.us>
Reply-To: plug-discuss@lists.plug.phoenix.az.us

Comments within.

> ###
> FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
> Contact: George Gambill
> Email: InstallFest@PLUG.phoenix.az.us
> Phone: <???>
> URL: http://PLUG.phoenix.az.us/
>
> Phoenix Linux Users Group (PLUG) offers installation of Free Software to
> the public.
>
> On Saturday, October 25, from 10:00 AM to 4:00 PM, PLUG invites the
> public to attend a no cost Linux InstallFest at the University of
> Advancing Technology, <UAT addy>. This is an opportunity for people who

Here is teh UAT Addy:
University of Advancing Technology
2625 West Baseline Road
Tempe, Arizona
85283-1042
United States

> are currently unfamiliar with GNU/Linux to learn more about it, and if
> they choose, install it on their own computer (PC or Mac) with the help
> of experienced Linux users.
>
> There will also be no cost presentations on Free Software and how to use
> it effectively for work or home.
>
> "For years Linux has provided IT professionals with a stable, cost
> effective solution in the file server arena. The only way end users

This should say file and web server.. also, IT should be information
technology, we can not assume people know acronyms.

> could know that their server was not running a Microsoft operating
> systems was the fact that it never crashes. Today Linux brings that same

This is poor form. We should not make personal attacks on Microsoft in
press releases. I would remove the entire line starting with "The only
way...that it never crashes." We have already stated that it is "stable",
no need for personal attacks.

> stability and cost savings to the office desktop environment," said
> George Gambill, project manager for the InstallFest.

Is project manager the best description or would event organizer or PLUG
member or something be more fitting?

> Gambill continued, "With packages like OpenOffice (Word Processing,
> Spread Sheets, Presentation) rivaling any commercially available
> offerings, it is easy to understand why Linux has been eagerly embraced
> by governmental agencies throughout the world. Not to mention such
> companies as IBM, Hewlett Packard."

Is spreadsheet one word? OpenOffice is commercial as well. Please we
must use the proper words. "rivaling any propreitary offerrings"..

I would use GNU/Linux throughout for consistency. It seems we are
bouncing back and forth. However, here I would use Free Software instead
of Linux. It should probably be government agencies not governmental..

> Linux is the core of a free operating system that includes software from
> projects such as GNU, GNOME and KDE. It can be installed as the lone
> operating system or alongside another operating system on the computer.

> "The GNU/Linux system is a stable, secure operating system that isn't
> susceptable to email, web or document viruses," said der.hans, CEO of
> Arizona Open Technologies Organization (AZOTO). "AZOTO is proud to help
> user groups promote the use of Free Software," he continued.

It is a lie to say it isn't "susceptable". It has a much better track
record and does things that make it much more resistant to such attacks.
Making sweeping claims only hurts our credibility down the road. For
those that make fun of MS Patches and think we are immune. Having to
patch ssh is a wake up call. There are massive differences, but it's
better to not over embellish.

> Come see Knoppix, a GNU/Linux distribution that runs right from CD
> without using the hard drive. Knoppix allows people to try GNU/Linux
> without it affecting their hard drive or requiring an install. PLUG uses
> Knoppix for GNU/Linux classes.
>
> There will also be demos of the Linux Terminal Server Project (LTSP)
> which can provide 20 fast workstations for under $2000, OpenOffice.org's
> office suite and the GIMP drawing program.

I still think that the whole number of workstations and a cost is akward
in this release. I would say something like "The LTSP provides a simple
way to utilize low cost workstations as either graphical or character
based terminals on a GNU/Linux server."

> These tools are all Free Software, guaranteeing people and companies the
> right to use the software as they wish. Free Software can be freely
> copied, modified and examined. Computer experts consider these freedoms
> essential to computer security and believe they provide more robust
> systems than proprietary software vendors.


> Attendees interested in having GNU/Linux installed on their computers
> should bring their computer, monitor, keyboard and mouse. Those who
> connect to the Internet using a dial-up modem should bring the modem as
> well.

> "In a phrase, Linux is ready. Come see why. Join us at the October 25th
> InstallFest," said Gambill.

-Derek