Delete the first sentence: too confrontational.
Change the comma to a period in the Eudora URL.
The emphasis on /not/ isn't needed. (It sounds pompous.)
Do a paragraph break before the final two sentences.
Insert "to" before "Microsoft" in the final sentence.
Delete "for the downloading" from the final sentence. (But will the
statement still be true? I'm thinking I used to pay for Eudora back when
I used it.)
--
Ed Skinner,
ed@flat5.net,
http://www.flat5.net/
Ed,
Good point, the first sentance isn't called for (or needed) and the
extra space will allow room for a paragraph break.
Dennis
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