Am 01. Jun, 2002 schwätzte
dennisk@sahuaro.f2s.com so:
> Here are Bill's changes to the Press Release for comment. This version is
> based on Victor's suggestion to make the press release more newsworthy.
>
> So, hwich version do we want to run with - this one? Or what's currently
> posted on the PLUG site?
I'd say go with this version. Please capitalize Free Software and Open
Source whereever they appear.
> ===
>
> On Saturday, June 22, the Phoenix Linux Users Group (PLUG) invites the
> public to a "GNU/Linux InstallFest" at Scottsdale Community College.
> Attendees will receive expert help in installing Linux, a freely
> available operating system, on their personal computers.
>
> After the InstallFest, users who brought their computers along can in many
> cases go home with working systems installed on their machines, free of
Let's leave out the 'in many cases'.
"After the InstallFest, people who brought their computers can go home with
GNU/Linux installed on their machines, free of charge."
The FAQ on the web site should mention that there aren't any guarantees and
we shouldn't explicitly guarantee anything in the press release, but can
leave off most of the exception clauses.
> charge. The package includes web browsers, word processors, and other
> usual tools that computer users expect.
>
> PLUG's organizer for the event is William Lindley, a computer consultant.
> "This is what the Free Software community is all about - helping each
> other, and we'll be helping folks get started," Lindley explained. "We're
> all looking forward to this InstallFest."
Maybe make a more active intro of Bill:
"PLUG's organizer for the event, computer consultant William Lindley, said,
"This is what the Free Software community...."
> The software is an alternative to Windows and other proprietary systems.
> Linux, GNU, FreeBSD and other "open source" and "free software" systems
> do not require any licensing or upgrade fees, and are said by many experts
> to be more efficient and secure than Windows systems.
>
> Businesses and home users alike are turning to free software which can be
> freely copied, modified, or examined, and which is considered by computer
> experts to be more robust and secure than proprietary systems.
>
> Though there is no charge, the term "free software" actually refers to
> freedom from license restrictions: Users are never asked to click "I
> Agree" to a list of prohibitions before using it, and organizations need
> not store "Certificates of Authenticity" in their safe deposit boxes in
> case of an audit.
>
> The free software products are available at no charge through the Internet
> or as an inexpensive distribution at most local computer stores, but the
> InstallFest offers users a completed installation by experienced Linux and
> FreeBSD administrators. Computer users are invited to bring their
> computers to the event. Usually, only the computer box, monitor, keyboard
> and mouse need be brought - see the PLUG web page for details.
>
> "Your old operating system can remain as an alternative, or we can replace
> it entirely," Lindley said, "depending on your plans for the machine and
> how much disk space you have to spare."
>
> "This is a really important next step in development of computers and the
> Internet -- making them more affordable and more secure," Lindley said.
> "We are here to show how easy it can be for computer users to move up to
> the next level."
>
> The event will be held from 10:00 a.m. to 4:00 p.m. in the College's
> Turquoise Room, at 9000 E. Chaparral Rd., Scottsdale, AZ. A map is
> available online at PLUG's web site, ( http://plug.phoenix.az.us ).
>
> PLUG members will be available to answer questions about Linux, Open
> Source software, and the Phoenix Linux Users Group as well.
>
> For more information about the InstallFest, email
> contact@plug.phoenix.az.us or call William Lindley at 480-947-6100
>
> PLUG is an informal group that holds several monthly meetings, on both the
> East and West sides of Phoenix, to talk about what they've recently done
> with Linux, GNU and open source software; to share problems and solutions,
This should be either 'several meetings' or 'on both the East and West
sides' because the sentence above indicates that we have several meetings on
the East side and several meetings on the West side. We might want to
replace Phoenix with 'the Valley'.
> and to discuss issues in the world of Free Software and computers in
> general. Knowledge of Linux is neither presumed nor required. Between
> meetings, PLUG members stay in touch through a busy e-mail discussion
> list.
>
> More information about PLUG can be found on the website at
> http://plug.phoenix.az.us/ .
>
> Scottsdale Community College offers two year degree programs in many
> disciplines including computers, arts, and science. SCC also offers
> university transfer programs and special interest courses, and has hosted
> several free software events.
Please add blurbs about our other sponsors and mention them somewhere in the
press release. That's why their in it.
Not sure we should have the blurbs for every sponsor, but they should
definitely get mentioned in the press release. News agencies can cut what we
have, but are unlikely to add what we don't.
Also, much of this is still gonna be word of mouth, so let's make sure it's
a mouthful :).
Hmm, maybe we should get a quote from Thurman about SCC being happy to host
the event.
ciao,
der.hans
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