brochure project Paragraph 4 - I love your critique!

[Josef Lowder]

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Robert, I love your critique and enthusiastically 
invite and welcome more.  You've given some of the 
best falling-out-of-the-chair laughing that my wife 
and I have had in a long time. 

To be sure, I will promptly correct these egregiously 
non-deft failings ;)) 

Many thanks! 

Joe

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On Sat, 06 Jan 2007, Robert N. Eaton wrote
> As an old English teacher I find paragraph four bothersome. My 
> favorite professor used to say, "To deftly split an infinitive is 
> the mark of a good writer." The phrase "...to not only freely 
> use..." is egregiously non-deft; moreover, it's arguably the worst 
> split since Kevin left Britney.
> 
> May I offer a slightly more graceful first sentence:
> 
> "Linux freedom allows users not only to use its operating system and 
> application programs freely, but also to MODIFY FREELY, CUSTOMIZE, 
> AND DISTRIBUTE FREELY both the basic operating system and its 
> application programs."
> 
> In addition, the first sentences of paragraph four and paragraph six 
> might have been composed by the Department of Redundancy Department.
> 
> Just to let you know somebody's reading the brochure and taking it 
> seriously (but good-humoredly.)