review: Computer Buyer article
Harwood
plug-discuss@lists.plug.phoenix.az.us
Thu, 8 Aug 2002 17:35:03 -0700 (US Mountain Standard Time)
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Hi Hans,=0D
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I suggest changing the wording of the first paragraph of section=0D
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holes" to "were designed to avoid the security holes"
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<DIV> </DIV>Hi Hans,<BR>---snip---<BR><chainsaw><BR>I su=
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changing the wording of the first paragraph of section<BR>"InstallF=
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to: "Due to the success of the July InstallFest, as well<BR>as many=
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requests for a subsequent event, PLUG has scheduled InstallFest2<BR=
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Glendale Community College on Saturday, September 28, 2002."<BR><BR=
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paragraph of that section - try to avoid negative words like<BR>"no=
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