On Sep 17 2003, at 16:22, George Gambill was caught saying:
> Hans wants a quote from the project manager (volunteer coordinator).  Below
> is the first pass at such a quote.  Please review it, making
> recommendations.  Be brutal.
> 
> Concerns of mine are: 
> 
> 1) should we mention Microsoft by name?

In the current context I think it's OK.  I don't like it when linux
advocacy turns to outright MS bashing, but that doesn't seem to be the
case.

> 2) The length maybe to long.

Length wise is good, but might want to join the 2nd and third paragraphs
since the former is more of a topic sentence for the whole paragraph.

Might want to rephrase those two paragraphs as:

Linux now brings that same stability and cost savings to the office
desktop with open source and comercial packages that rival those
available on Windows.  Need to share documents with Windows? Use
OpenOffice, the premeire app for word processing, spread sheets,
and presentations. End users like Outlook? Evolution does all that
and it won't infect your network with viri. It is easy to understand
why Linux has been eagerly embraced by governmental agencies throughout
the world and large tech companies such as IBM, HP, and Ford Motors.

> 3) Maybe (hopefully) other (more) packages like OpenOffice.

Gimp and Evolution 

> 4) More companies than just IBM and HP.  What are they?

SCO ;)

I would remove the quotes around stable and cost effective.  While
they are marketing buzzwords that MS uses all the time, these are
also really important factors for the switch over to linux. Same
goes with office desktop.

Is this being sent out via email or a flyer? If email, you may
want to put little [X] (1 <= X <= infinity) for the companies and
have a list of URLs pointing to articles about these companies
embracing Linux. Truth in advertising. :)

> Quote:
> 
> For years Linux has provided IT professionals with a "stable", "cost
> effective" solution in the file server arena.  The only way end users could
> know that their server was not running a Microsoft operating systems was the
> fact that it never crashes.
> 
> Today Linux brings that same stability and cost savings to the "office
> desktop" environment.  
> 
> With packages like OpenOffice (Word Processing, Spread Sheets, Presentation)
> rivaling any commercially available offerings, it is easy to understand why
> Linux has been eagerly embraced by governmental agencies throughout the
> world.  Not to mention such companies as IBM, Hewlett Packard.
> 
> In a phrase, Linux is ready.  Come see why.  Join us at the October 25th
> InstallFest.
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