--------------Boundary-00=_FAWJQL80000000000000 Content-Type: Text/Plain; charset="iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable =0D Due to the success of the July....=0D =0D should be=0D =0D Because of the success....=0D =0D =0D =0D (Due to.. is bad usage even if it is common)=0D =0D Paul=0D =0D -------Original Message-------=0D =0D From: plug-discuss@lists.plug.phoenix.az.us=0D Date: Thursday, August 08, 2002 05:11:47 PM=0D To: plug-discuss@lists.plug.phoenix.az.us=0D Subject: Re: review: Computer Buyer article=0D =0D Hi Hans,=0D ---snip---=0D =0D I suggest changing the wording of the first paragraph of section=0D "InstallFest2" to: "Due to the success of the July InstallFest, as well=0D as many requests for a subsequent event, PLUG has scheduled InstallFest2=0D at Glendale Community College on Saturday, September 28, 2002."=0D =0D Third paragraph of that section - try to avoid negative words like=0D "not." I suggest rewording "were designed to not have the security=0D holes" to "were designed to avoid the security holes" --------------Boundary-00=_FAWJQL80000000000000 Content-Type: Text/HTML; charset="iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable =0D =0A

Due to the success of the July....

should be

Because of the success....

(Due to.. is bad usage even if it is common)

Paul

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From: plug-discuss@= lists.plug.phoenix.az.us

Date: Thursd= ay, August=20 08, 2002 05:11:47 PM

To: plug-discuss@= lists.plug.phoenix.az.us

Subject: Re:= review:=20 Computer Buyer article

Hi Hans,
---snip---
<chainsaw>
I su= ggest=20 changing the wording of the first paragraph of section
"InstallF= est2"=20 to: "Due to the success of the July InstallFest, as well
as many= =20 requests for a subsequent event, PLUG has scheduled InstallFest2at=20 Glendale Community College on Saturday, September 28, 2002."
Third=20 paragraph of that section - try to avoid negative words like
"no= t." I=20 suggest rewording "were designed to not have the security
holes"= to=20 "were designed to avoid the security holes"

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